tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19623437.post3017256427628973225..comments2023-09-23T12:13:10.019+00:00Comments on December Quinn, Erotic Romance<br>Stacia Kane, Sexy Urban Fantasy: Scene Crit 5--CrittedStaciahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07969399927758009095noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19623437.post-63868788433762738892008-09-13T03:25:00.000+00:002008-09-13T03:25:00.000+00:00Darn! It was a busy day at work, and I didn't get ...Darn! It was a busy day at work, and I didn't get a chance to crit this...<BR/><BR/>I didn't notice the dialogue tags as much as I did the weak, passive verbs. I think it's because I'm editing them out of mine at the moment though ;)<BR/><BR/>I quite liked this, and for once found first person sex engaging. No one else has ever done that! Well done! <BR/><BR/>Some of it could be tightened as D shows, and I absolutely love the final gesture.Seeley deBornhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02692166883821777947noreply@blogger.com